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WRITING The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Grams per person per week Fish and meat consumption 300 250 200 50 150 大家 Chicken .com Beef 100 Lamb 50 Fish 0 1979 1984 1989 1994 1999 2004

WRITING The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Grams per person per week Fish and meat consumption 300 250 200 50 150 大家 Chicken .com Beef 100 Lamb 50 Fish 0 1979 1984 1989 1994 1999 2004
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The line graph presents data about meat and Fish
consumption
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 in one European country From 1979 to 2004 .
overall
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chicken
consumption
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 has been on the rise throughout the Years, But as for beef and
lamb
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 the numbers are declining at a similar rate,
whereas
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 Fish
Consumption
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 remains Steady. In detail, beef
consumption
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 started at almost 210
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 a week per Person but the number Kept Fluctuating
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to nearly
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100
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 in 2004. chicken and lamb
consumption
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 in 1979 was the same with approximately150
grams
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 per person, Yet the chicken line Kept escalating reaching 250
grams
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 by 2004 , but the reverse is true for
lamp
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the lamp
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 which witnessed a dramatic decrease over the Years Finishing at virtually 70
grams
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 by 2004 , Fish
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 remained relatively stable at 50
grams
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 per person each week .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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