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WRITING The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Grams per person per week Fish and meat consumption 300 250 200 50 150 大家 Chicken .com Beef 100 Lamb 50 Fish 0 1979 1984 1989 1994 1999 2004

WRITING The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Grams per person per week Fish and meat consumption 300 250 200 50 150 大家 Chicken .com Beef 100 Lamb 50 Fish 0 1979 1984 1989 1994 1999 2004
#consumption #fish #kinds #meat #european #country #summarise #information #features #comparisons #grams #person #week #chicken #com #beef #lamb
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does
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the
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apply
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european
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European
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 people
consume
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consumed
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 four
kind
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kinds
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 of
meat
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 chicken, beef, lamb and fish in the period between 1979
to
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and
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 2004.
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 we can see that people consume chicken and beef the most meanwhile, fish consumption
is
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has been
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 almost stable throughout the years and it holds the place for the lowest consumed
meat
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. Chicken started
of
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 in early 1979 with 150
grams
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 per person per week and it
experineced
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experienced
 a linear increase to reach almost 250
grams
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 and
becoming
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became
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 the most consumed
meat
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. Beef has fluctuated as it was the highest with almost 220
grams
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then
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 it started to decrease to reach the point of 120
grams
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, Lamb
also
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sufferd
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suffered
 a decrease in consumption. But for
fish
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fish,
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 it still function as the least consumed
meat
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 but the
grams
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 consumed didn't change dramatically.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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