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The charts below show the proportions of British students at oen university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at oen university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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 about the
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languages language
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 not speak other languages in 2000 were more than in
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 chart the
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 in 2000 was 15% but the percentage in 2010 was higher by 5%,
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