The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line bar illustrates the number of plastic surgeries
were
conducted in Korea, specifically for Unnecessary verb
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men
in 2004, who underwent mainly four types of cosmetic operations
It is obvious that the most popular procedure the
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Korean's
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Korean
men
preferred
to do is Wrong verb form
prefer
the
hair
transplantation , which reached up to 60 surgeries Correct article usage
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at
the period of the study. Change preposition
during
Moreover
, it is clear that
laser skin resurfacing occupied the second most desirable plastic surgery by men
at around 58 cases.
Whereas
, the least common demanding operation
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operations
were
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was
facelt
surgery and abdominoplasty at approximately 16 and 19 respectively.
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facelift
felt
To conclude
, the figures show that Korean men
concentrate on cosmetic surgery that attempt
to enhance the skin and hair features more than other parts of the body.Correct subject-verb agreement
attempts
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