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The chart below shows the proportion of survey respondents that showed interest in particular sports in three different years in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of survey respondents that showed interest in particular sports in three different years in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart presents the
prcentages
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percentages
percentage
 of survey respondents in the UK which
they
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have funny
time
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times
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with
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at
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 different
time
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times
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that
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apply
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namely : 1990 , 2000 and 210.
Overall
, the chart
compare
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compares
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 with
variou
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various
 of
sport
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sports
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whic
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which
 the highest
number
 was football in 1990
in contrast
, the lowest
number
 was Judo in 2010 . Generally speaking, in 1900 , football was
a
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the
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 top
number
 in the chart
after
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and after
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 that golf
has
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was
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 been second
number
 and as
it is clear that
 cricket and rugby have the same finger to record 12
finally
 In 1990 was the
lower
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lowest
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 rate. In 2000 and 2010 the was a
miner
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minor
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 change in the sport of football
However
, rugby has been increased in 2010 .  Cricket and in 2000 and 2010 they
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had
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 a
number
 just under quarter
while
,
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judo in three different
time
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times
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 has been
nuder
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under
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 tenth . The
last
 name of
sport
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the sport
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 was swimming
also
 the best record was just
nuder
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under
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 20 and the worst rate of swimming was a quarter .
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