The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

You should write at least 150 words.
A glance at the accompanying data indicates the percentage of
export
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exports
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to 4 countries from
Australia
between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
,
Australia
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Australia's
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exports to China and India have grown from starting points at the completion of the time present. Japan and
US
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the US
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,
on the other hand
, had fallen marginally. Looking in more detail, in 1990
Australia
exported less than 5% to China and slightly more than its
export
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exports
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to India.
However
, from 2000 to 2010 shipping to China upsurged
surprassing
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surpassing
surprising
two states for more than a quarter. Exporting to Japan,
on the other hand
, had started
decline
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to decline
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20
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by 20
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% in 1995 and since
then
the rate almost unchanged.
Althought
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Although
US
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the US
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had
drop
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in
same
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the same
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year
with
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as
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Japan to about 9%,
its
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it
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increase
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increased
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in 2000 before plunging and rebounding marginally in 2012 for a final value
just
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of just
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over 5%.
India
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India's
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imports from
Australia
recorded small numbers percentage over a quarter century but its progress
beginning
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began
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in 2000, reaching a peak of 6% through
US
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the US
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before little dropping in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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