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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
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illustrates
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number
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 of
citiznes
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citizens
 in
China
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 and
India
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 between 2000 and today and
expected
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 changes in population by the
year
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 2050. It can be clearly seen that both countries will have an increase in the
number
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 of their residents.
China
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 will reach
the
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peak
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 in 2030
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India
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 will reach
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peak
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 in 2050. In 2000,
China
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 started with a population of 1250
billion
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 people and gradually increased over time and
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 to reach a
peak
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 of 1450
billion
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 residents by the
year
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 2030. The
number
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 of people in
China
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 is anticipated to
experince
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experience
 a gradual decrease over a
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twenty-year
year
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 period before
finally
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 standing at 1390
billion
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 in the
year
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 2050.
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, the
number
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 of citizens in
India
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 in 2000
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with
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 only 1000
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 before
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experiencing
 a rapid and
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significant
 incline
by
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of
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 40% over a
twenteey-five-
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twenty-five-year
year
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 period before reaching a
peak
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 today
at1400
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at 1400
billion
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. The population in
India
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 is expected to
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continue
 to rise by 60% from the
year
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 2000 before reaching a high of 1600
billion
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 in the
year
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 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, china, india, year, peak, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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