The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bars depict how many workers worked in three different sectors
in
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1980 and 2010.
This
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survey was conducted in four developed countries, which are Germany, the USA, Japan, and China.
Overall
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,
while
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the agriculture and service sectors showed degradation, the industry sector increased in three countries, except China
that
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remained stable in 2010. The percentage of agriculture workers remained the smallest figure, accounting
no
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for no
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more than 10% in both years and showing no significant
fell
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across
three
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the three
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nations.
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, in 1980, Chinese
cultivication
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cultivation
comprised the majority of the workforce, making up 70% of the total. The service area,
on the other hand
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,
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the
second highest
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option in every country in the first period. In 2010, the industrial area in Germany and the USA received a similar increase in workforce, both climbing by 20%. Japan
also
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experienced a similar trend, with the proportion of industrial workers rising from 50% in 1980 to 80% in 2010.
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, the proportion of China
laborers
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labourers
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in
industry
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the industry
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zone was not as large as
other
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in other
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states with 40%,
it
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which
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was 10% lower than
agriculture
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in agriculture
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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