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YThe two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

YThe two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line charts provided above
depicts
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depict
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 the cost of New
zealand
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Zealand
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 bought goods from
Australia
 and
Japan
 between a twenty-year period
spaning
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spanning
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 from 1994. It can be seen that the volume of imports from
Australia
 doubled
while
money
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the money
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 value of
item
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items
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 imported from
Japan
 decreased
notebly
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notably
noticeably
. Regarding the Japanese trend, at the beginning, it stood at 4 billion
dollars
, with a significant increase, it reached over 6000
million
 in 1996, which is nearly the same as the amount of imports from
Japan
. By the year 1997,
although
 New Zealand had reduced its importations from both countries until 1999, it tended to purchase much
less
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fewer
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 commodities from
Australia
 than
Japan
. In that year,
merchandises
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merchandise
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costed
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cost
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 3000
million
dollars
 came from
Australia
,
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 and over 4000
million
 from
other country
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another country
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. After 1996, the volume of imported goods from
Australia
 experienced an abrupt jump, and it reached a peak of 7500
million
 by the end of
century
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, 1500
million
dollars
 more than that of
Japan
 in the same year. Following
that
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although
 both trends saw a fall afterwards, the Australian one recovered by a rapid rise to
stopped
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 at 8000
million
dollars
, but the imported items from
Japan
 permanently fell in a way that they were a quarter of imported goods from
Australia
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, japan, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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