The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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report is to summarize which employment

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graduates of Brighton University chose in the year 2019, compare and contrast dominating fields in the pie chart

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a general overview of the data.

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we can immediately see that

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industries make up a third of jobs taken by Brighton University graduates. The second highest ranking sector is the manufacturing industry with about half as many employees as

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industries. Politics and government

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education are the substantial

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% difference. With the lesser being education at almost 15%. Science and technology with transportation and warehousing have about the same values, teetering at around seven

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. The least picked jobs are in the charity and sports

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, with the latter grossing only 0.1

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of university alumni. Unspecified

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and civil

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combined make up nearly ten

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of job acceptions.

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the most picked sector is public administration industries, with the other major ones being manufacturing, politics and government, and education. On the flip side: transportation and warehousing, science and technology, civil

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, charity, sports, and unspecified

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make up a minority in the pie chart.

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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Many students like to get involved in extra- curricular activities at university such as social clubs and sports. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?