You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The aim of
this
report is to summarize which employment
sectors
graduates of Brighton University chose in the year 2019, compare and contrast dominating fields in the pie chart
besides
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a general overview of the data.
Overall
we can immediately see that
service
industries make up a third of jobs taken by Brighton University graduates. The second highest ranking sector is the manufacturing industry with about half as many employees as
service
industries. Politics and government
as well as
education are the substantial
runner ups
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, with
an
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only
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% difference. With the lesser being education at almost 15%. Science and technology with transportation and warehousing have about the same values, teetering at around seven
percent
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. The least picked jobs are in the charity and sports
sectors
, with the latter grossing only 0.1
percent
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of university alumni. Unspecified
sectors
and civil
service
combined make up nearly ten
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of job acceptions.
To conclude
the most picked sector is public administration industries, with the other major ones being manufacturing, politics and government, and education. On the flip side: transportation and warehousing, science and technology, civil
service
, charity, sports, and unspecified
sectors
make up a minority in the pie chart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, service with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • sector
  • employment
  • graduate
  • university
  • compare
  • contrast
  • notable
  • trend
  • pattern
  • significant
  • specialist industry
  • general sector
  • historical data
  • implied
  • percent
  • percentage
  • sizeable
  • demonstrate
  • highlight
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