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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
lines
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 graph and the pie chart illustrate the
amount
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number
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 of books
lended
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lent
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 and the type by four different libraries, respectively, in
summer
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the summer
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 months.
Overall
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,
there
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it
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 is appreciated that reading interest fluctuated
along
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during
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 the summer,
also
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, fiction books were the most wanted. Taking a look at the first representation it could be seen that some places were more into reading than others.
Firstly
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, West Eaton and Church Mount went hand in hand slowly increasing,
however
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 the trends were different. Both started borrowing 50 books,
however
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, during the first month in the second
village
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village,
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 the amount
was
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doubled
while
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 in the other it grew a bit more.
Then
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, by August 150 copies were provided in West Eaton, and that
chifre
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chiefs
 got
stabilizes
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;
whereas
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, in Church
Mount
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Mount,
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 that number got reached in September.
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, in Ryeslip people
lose
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lost
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 interest gradually
while
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 months went by, starting from 300 and ending with fewer than 200 exemplary.
Lastly
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, in Sutton
Wood
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Wood,
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 the number started at 250 in June, slightly climbed to 275 the following month,
when
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 plummeted in August touching the nadir at 100.
Nevertheless
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, it grew achieving a higher amount than the beginning.
In addition
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, fiction novels were on top
being
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the
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43%,
then
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 biography was the second most wanted
being
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19%. Plus, historical and science novels were 14% and self-help a 10%. To summarize, people were willing to spend time reading mostly fiction, in some places more than others.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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