The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British prison system. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Given are two figures concerning criminality in Britain. The first provides data on the rates of conviction among
men
and women
of various ages, while
the second indicates the gender balance of the UK prison population It is apparent from the information supplied that the rate of conviction among Brits of both sexes increases exponentially during
adolescence and peaks at the age of about 20. Change preposition
apply
Also
evident is the fact that men
are far more likely to offend than women
. From a negligible 2 per cent
among 10-year-old boys, the male conviction rate soars to approximately 16 per cent
among 20-year-olds. The percentage of female offenders, meanwhile, climbs from 0 per cent
among girls of 10 to some 5 per cent
for 20-year-olds. The subsequent decades, however
, see dramatic decreases in criminality among both sexes. A mere 2 per cent
of crimes are committed by 60-year-old men
and 0 per cent
by women
of the same age. As for the proportion of male and female prison inmates, men
outnumber women
24 to 1. Some 96 per cent
of all prisoners are men
, while
the remainder is
female.Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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