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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should second

The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should second
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The table and bar charts depict the amount of
time
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 spent on leisure and housework activities by gender in the UK in 2008.
Overall
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, watching TV, radio, and video was the most
time
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-consuming activity among both sexes. Meanwhile,
women
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 spent more
time
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almost
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in
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all kinds of household chores except for repair categories, which were mostly done by
men
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. Regarding the leisure activities list, the number of
men
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 spending
time
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 watching TV, videos, and listening to the radio stood at 137
minutes
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, which was 19
minutes
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 longer than that of
women
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.
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, sports exercises showed a similar pattern, with males spending 15
minutes
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. As opposed to these, reading books presented that
women
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 using their
time
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 outweighed
men
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, there was a tiny gap with 18 for
men
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 and 19 for
women
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. As for the bar chat about housework, females accounted for nearly 80
minutes
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in
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 cooking and washing, which is almost double that of males. Recording the same trend, the figure for clothing washing and ironing was half an hour, twice as much as the
time
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 of the opposite gender.
Although
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 in three categories, including shopping,
men
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 engaged less
time
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, they allocated more
time
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 to repairing chores, at almost 20
minutes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, women, men, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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