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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the graphs illustrate the differences between
men
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 and women in the UK in spending
time
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 for leisure and household
activities
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 in 2008.
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, UK's males spent more
time
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 on
leisuring
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leisure
 than females,
while
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 domestic chores saw an opposite scenario.
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, the disparity in average
minutes
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 per
day
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 for entertaining between them was smaller than that in doing household
activities
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. Looking at the charts in more detail, in terms of leisure
activites
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activities
, it took
men
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 about nearly 140
minutes
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 daily for media like TV,
video
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and video
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, and
woman
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women
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is
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apply
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spen
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spent
on
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this
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 less amount
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time
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of time
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 . Reading books and is the
unconcentrate
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concentrated
activities
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, both
them
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they
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 showed similar figures for reading, at roughly 20
minutes
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 per
day
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. Taking household tasks into consideration, women in the UK spent most of their
time
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 on cooking and washing, at nearly 80
minutes
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 per
day
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, which was more than twice
as
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apply
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that of
men
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.
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, shopping and clothes washing and ironing accounted for roughly 35
minutes
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 of women's daily
time
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,
whereas
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men
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 spent about 25 and 10
minutes
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 per
day
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 for each
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activities
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activity
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, time, activities, minutes, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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