The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data displays the proportion of Australian
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
in six different Fix the agreement mistake
females
age
groups who did Use synonyms
every day
physical work in 2010.
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everyday
Overall
, it can be seen that in every Linking Words
age
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group
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group,
women
did the highest physical activities. Use synonyms
While
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,
men did less than Remove the comma
apply
women
.
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To begin
with, at Linking Words
first
the Add a comma
first,
age
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group
of 15 to 24 men did 52.8% of physical work but Use synonyms
people
who were 25 to 34 the Change preposition
for people
amount
of activities dropped Change the quantifier
number
10
% and remained Change preposition
by 10
42.2
% Change preposition
at 42.2
similarly
, in the Linking Words
age
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group
of 35 to 44 Use synonyms
was
39.5%. Unnecessary verb
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However
, increased a little in the Linking Words
age
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group
of 45 to 54 approximately 43.1% and gained more from 55 to over 65 Use synonyms
was
46.7%.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
women
were 47.7% at the beginning but increased gradually Use synonyms
age
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group
by Use synonyms
age
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group
from 15-24 Use synonyms
age
to 45 to 54 Use synonyms
age
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group
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were
the peak for Correct subject-verb agreement
was
women
, in that time they did the majority amount of physical work. But in the Use synonyms
age
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group
of 55 to 64 decreased a few amount and stayed around 53% but Use synonyms
at the end
those who Linking Words
65
or over Add a missing verb
were 65
they
stayed at 47.1%.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, women with synonyms.
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