The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK's males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008.

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The table below illustrates the comparison of

spended

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spending

time, in minutes per day, by United Kingdom

men

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and

women

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on household and leisure

activites

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activities

in 2008. First of all

majoriy

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majority

men

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and

women

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watch TV, listen radio, and watch various

video

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videos

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and the quantity of both sides is 137 to 118.

Number

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of books

reading

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and

sport

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exercises is too low 11 to 19,

this

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is very bad due

tue

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the

people do not develop in their lives and mostly just relax.

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Secondly

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we see the chart of housework activities

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also

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and also

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average

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the average

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minute

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minutes

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per day. Mostly

women

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does

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the housework,

while

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men

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are

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breadwinner

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breadwinners

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, but some activities like repair can be done by

man

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men

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because they

ofthen

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then

handle home repairs

due to

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traditional roles, physical

strenght

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strength

and early exposure to tools and technical skills. In

conclusion

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I can give

verdict

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a verdict

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that in housework activities like cooking, washing and shopping

women

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does

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more than

men

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because

traditional

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of traditional

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roles, social expectations, and being taught these skills from a young age.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

168 words

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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK's males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008.

Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

In today’s world many people own a smartphone. Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages?

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Animal testing is the only way to guarantee the safety of new products Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field can have a negative influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.