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the line graph shows the value of australia's trade with china, the USA and Japan from 2002 to 2005 in AUD billion dollars. summerizing the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparison where relevant

the line graph shows the value of australia's trade with china, the USA and Japan from 2002 to 2005 in AUD billion dollars. summerizing the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparison where relevant
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There are three charts
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of
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trade
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the trade
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value
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 of Australia with three nations,
china
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China
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, the USA and
japan
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Japan
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during
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 2002 to 2008.
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, Most of the time
value
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 of
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export
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exports
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 always higher than
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value
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the value
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 of
import
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, and important
value
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only
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 higher than
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value
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the value
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 of
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export
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exports
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 in the
trade
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 with
china
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China
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. Start with
chart
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a chart
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 of
trade
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 with
china
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China
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.
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Value
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 of
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export
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exports
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 stayed stable at the level of approximately 40
AUD
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billion
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dollars
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.
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 import
value
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start
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with
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 about 37
AUD
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billion
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dollars
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,
droped
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dropped
 slightly to
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20
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billion
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dollars
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 in 2005.
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 the
value
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 climbed significantly and about 2007 they had the same
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about
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of about
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 40
AUD
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billion
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dollars
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,
finally
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reached to
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 about 42
AUD
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billion
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dollars
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 in 2008. Moving onto the chart
that
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Australia's
trade
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value
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 with
the
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japan.
Export
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value
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 started
with
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at
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 about 40
AUD
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billion
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dollars
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 in 2002,
remianed
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remained
 the same level during the period to 2005, and increased sharply to over 50
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billion
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dollars
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 in about 2006 and decreased back to
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about 42
AUD
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billion
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dollars
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, value, export, aud, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
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