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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart compares the
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propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of languages
students
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 in
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 university could speak in 2000 and 2010, categorized into 6 intervals. An overview of two charts showcased that
students
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 that could speak Spanish except English occupied the most
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propotion
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proportion
promotion
 whenever in which year. It is noteworthy that more and more
students
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 can speak two other languages as time went by. Specifically, except
students
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 that can
also
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 speak Spanish with the most
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propotion
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proportion
, accounting for 30% in 2000 , the second biggest group in 2000 was
students
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 that only speak English which took up 20%.
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,
students
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 speaking German and French held 10% and 15% respectively. When it comes to the chart representing data in 2010, there is
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 descend in the
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propotion
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proportion
 of
students
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 that can not speak other languages, from 20% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.
By contrast
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, the charts in 2010 witnessed a considerable increase
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 the quantities that
students
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being
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able to speak another
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language
, varying from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words propotion, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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