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I will give you the information of a table from an IELTS exam for of academic type. please write a writing for IELTS with band score of 8. The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table presents data on the proportion and number of various family types living in
poverty
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 in Australia in 1999. It reveals significant disparities in
poverty
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 levels among different family categories, with sole parents and single
individuals
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 without
children
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 being the most affected,
while
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 aged
couples
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 experienced the lowest rates of
poverty
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.
Sole parent
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Sole-parent
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 households had the highest
poverty
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rate
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, at 21%, equating to 232,000
families
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. Single
individuals
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 without
children
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 were
also
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 notably impacted, with 19% (359,000) living below the
poverty
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 line.
Couples
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 with
children
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, despite having a lower
poverty
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rate
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 of 12%, made up the largest group in absolute terms, with 933,000 households affected, highlighting the financial challenges faced by
families
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 with dependents.
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, aged
couples
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 exhibited the lowest
poverty
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rate
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 at just 4% (48,000), indicating greater financial stability in
this
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 group.
Single aged
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individuals
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,
however
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, experienced a slightly higher
poverty
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rate
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 of 6% (54,000).
Couples
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 without
children
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also
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 demonstrated a relatively low
poverty
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 level, with 7% (211,000) falling into
this
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 category.
Overall
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, 11% of all Australian households, amounting to 1,837,000
families
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, were living in
poverty
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 in 1999. The data emphasizes significant differences across family types, with single-parent
families
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 and single
individuals
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 particularly vulnerable,
while
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 aged
couples
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 faced the least financial hardship. These findings suggest that household composition strongly influences
poverty
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 levels.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, individuals, children, couples, rate, families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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