Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development?
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a number of employers who consider that new
official academic degrees are more crucial in comparison
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experience or personal qualities.
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and its positive side.
Body
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knowledge which
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in special schools
as universities, colleges and high schools is the main part of career prospection. Because
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they will be able to acquire and enter the courses which assisted in
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way i.e. a job.
, new employees
could have an opportunity to get more experience in their workplace.
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degree that
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not decide the future of
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. Nowadays, if
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wants to change his major he will do it easily.
, getting
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is never
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being successful even life.
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Ensure that each paragraph leads logically to the next. Use linking words effectively to guide the reader.
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Your essay tackles an important issue and tries to present a balanced view on the importance of academic qualifications vs. life experience.
The essay starts with a clear introduction of the topic and presents the intention to discuss both perspectives.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general