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The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian province between 2001 and 2006.

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian province between 2001 and 2006.
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below provides the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in diverse Canadian areas in the range of 2001 and 2006 We are persuaded
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 the chart that completely all the
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 of international graduates after 5 years. The highest result was shown by New Brunswick.
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 as can be seen Ontario went through
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. Nova Scotia and British Columbia showed nearly the same percentage by 2006 hitting about 11 percent. The same thing with Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador
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raised twice and showcased
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 were Quebec and Nova Scotia showed
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 around 1-2 %. In general,British Columbia had
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 and sixth year of
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 of its graduates more
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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