The table and chart below show the time spent at leisure and household activities in Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Leisure activities (Average Men Women minutes per day) TV, video, radio Reading Sport 137 118 18 19 15 11 Household activities (Average minutes per day) cooking and washing shopping repair clothes washing and ironing Men Women 0 20 40 60 80
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The table and chart illustrate hours
spend
at entertainment and house in Britain.
Wrong verb form
spent
Overall
, TV , video, and Linking Words
was
both female and Unnecessary verb
apply
and
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apply
male
spent Fix the agreement mistake
males
most
time on it. Add an article
the most
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Moreover
it can be clearly seen that cooking and washing Add a comma
Moreover,
where
the best house Correct your spelling
were
activities
they both prefer and spend more minutes on Use synonyms
it
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Regarding the table, Correct pronoun usage
them
men
were more than women in all leisure Use synonyms
activities
hours per day except reading Use synonyms
book
, women were spending more time on it by 19. Fix the agreement mistake
books
However
, we do not spend time on sports Linking Words
unlike
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, unlike
men
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they
spend 15 minutes per day.
Correct pronoun usage
who
On the other hand
, in household Linking Words
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activities
women reach a peak in cooking and washing with 78 hours. Add a comma
activities,
Moreover
, they were higher than Linking Words
men
in other Use synonyms
activities
like shopping Use synonyms
with
35, Change preposition
at
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however
the Add a comma
however,
men
just Use synonyms
spend
23 minutes.Wrong verb form
spent
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