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The table and chart below show the time spent at leisure and household activities in Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Leisure activities (Average Men Women minutes per day) TV, video, radio Reading Sport 137 118 18 19 15 11 Household activities (Average minutes per day) cooking and washing shopping repair clothes washing and ironing Men Women 0 20 40 60 80

The table and chart illustrate hours
spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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 at entertainment and house in Britain. 
Overall
Linking Words
, TV , video, and
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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both female and
and
Remove the redundancy
apply
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male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
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 spent
most
Add an article
the most
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 time on it.
Linking Words
Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 it can be clearly seen that cooking and washing
where
Correct your spelling
were
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 the best house
activities
Use synonyms
 they both prefer and spend more minutes on
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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. Regarding the table,
men
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 were more than women in all leisure
activities
Use synonyms
 hours per day except reading
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
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, women were spending more time on it by 19.
However
Linking Words
 , we do not spend time on sports
unlike
Add the comma(s)
, unlike
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men
Use synonyms
they
Correct pronoun usage
who
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 spend 15 minutes per day.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, in household
Use synonyms
activities
Add a comma
activities,
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 women reach a peak in cooking and washing with 78 hours.
Moreover
Linking Words
, they were higher than
men
Use synonyms
 in other
activities
Use synonyms
 like shopping
with
Change preposition
at
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 35,
Linking Words
however
Add a comma
however,
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 the
men
Use synonyms
 just
spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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 23 minutes.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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