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The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
employment
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 rates in public, private, and self-employed sectors from 1910 to 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the proportion of individuals working in the public and self-employed sectors exhibited a gradual increase,
employment
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 in the private
sector
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 declined significantly. Notably, the private
sector
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 dropped from its peak in 2000 to its lowest point, below all other categories, by the end of the
period
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. In the private
sector
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, the
employment
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 rate began to decline sharply from 2000, reaching approximately 40% by 2002.
This
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 was followed by a brief
period
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 of stability until 2003.
Subsequently
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, the figures experienced a moderate decrease over the next two decades, falling to around 20% by 2010.
Conversely
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, the public and self-employed sectors showed consistent growth throughout the
period
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.
Employment
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 in public roles rose steadily by nearly 10% from 2000 to 2010,
while
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 the self-employed group followed a similar upward trajectory.
However
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, self-employed rates experienced slight fluctuations within a five-year span,
whereas
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 public
sector
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employment
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, after remaining stable for two years, surged dramatically to approximately 50% in 2005. From 2006 onwards, both categories continued to grow gradually, reaching their highest levels by the end of the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, sector, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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