The bar chart belows shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart belows shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart highlights the proportion of males and females living in Australia and doing regular physical activities by different ages in 2010.
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staying active physically takes over the number of males of almost all ages. Despite young people under 24 and old people aged above 65, where males approximately equal or even more than females do exercises constantly, other communities show the opposite side. In 2010, the groups of ages between 35 and 44, 45 and 54, 55 and 64 have a larger proportion of women than men, by 13%, 10.2% and 7.9%, respectively.
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, the individuals from 25 to 24 years old demonstrate the dominance of females, but only by 6.7%. The bodies where boys overtake the number of girls in sports are those between 15 and 24 years old, by 5.1%. And only people aged above 65 show almost the same statistic with slight dominant from men.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regular physical activity
  • percentage (%)
  • age groups
  • gender comparison
  • Australian demographics
  • bar chart
  • trends
  • peak activity levels
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • vigorous exercise
  • moderate exercise
  • age bracket
  • physically active
  • statistical overview
  • exercise habits
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