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Band 5.5

Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: -what are the changes -what are the problems you are facing -what part of the service would you like to change

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing on behalf of
residents
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the residents
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 of Blue
street
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Street
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, in order to draw your attention to the matter of recent changes in bus timetables that
has
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 made our lives uncomfortable. There is a bus station next to the library
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 mainly filled with students commuting there. Recently, the departure times
has
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have been
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 postponed to after 8.30 and all the buses to
city
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the city
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center
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 are cancelled
due to
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 the road construction in A4 street.
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, those who have to go to work or university early in the morning are facing difficulties reaching
to
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their destinations. Personally, most of my morning classes, start at 8 o’clock which means with
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 new schedule I have to
spent
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 more than an hour to get to the college. I think it is
everyone’s
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in everyone’s
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 best
of
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interest to find ways to improve the quality of our public transportation. I would like to ask for a revision in bus departure times with regard to its
inconveniency
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inconvenience
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 for the majority of passengers. Thank you for your cooperation on
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 matter and I look forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully Jennifer Lopez

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task achievement
Consider providing specific details about how the changes to the bus service impact you and others. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your paragraphs contain clear main ideas, and consider varying your sentence structures for improved readability.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for subject-verb agreement in sentences, as minor errors can slightly detract from the clarity of your writing.
task achievement
Your letter effectively addresses the specific changes to the bus service and expresses the difficulties faced by the residents.
task achievement
You maintained a polite and professional tone throughout the letter, making it suitable for formal communication.
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