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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar provides information about the proportions of
individual
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individuals
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 who have
been
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eaten five per cent healthy meals each day in The United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008 .
Overall
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, the bar illustrates
amount
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the amount
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 of fruit and vegetables
with
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compared with women , men and
children
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, it
clear
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is clear
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 that the highest consumption was
famle
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family
 during the general period
while
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,
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 the lowest proportion was
children
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 throughout
this
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 period.
To begin
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 with, in the first three years in the chart there are similarities
consumption
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in consumption
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 between males and
juvenile
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juveniles
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,
on the contrary
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 women ate more than males and
juvenlie
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juveniles
juvenile
 throughout the period
in addition
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 in the year 2006 the figure
of
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for
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 women
was reached
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has reached
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 the peak point it was 35 % after that it decreased to reach
at the end
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 of
chart
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the chart
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 at 30 per cent . On the one
side
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side,
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 the rate of men's and
children
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's rose gradually until 2007
whereas
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it
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apply
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obviously there are
less
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fewer
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declines
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decline
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in
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at
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 the end of
chart
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the chart
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by
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for
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men's
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men
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 and
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children's
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children
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 who ate healthy foods .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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