The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar provides information about the proportions of
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals

It seems that individual may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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who have
been
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb been appears to be unnecessary here.

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eaten five per cent healthy meals each day in The United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008 .
Overall
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, the bar illustrates
amount
Add an article
the amount

The noun phrase amount seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of fruit and vegetables
with
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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compared with women , men and
children
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, it
clear
Add a missing verb
is clear

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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that the highest consumption was
famle
Correct your spelling
family

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during the general period
while
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,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction while. Consider removing the comma.

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the lowest proportion was
children
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

throughout
this
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period.
To begin
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with, in the first three years in the chart there are similarities
consumption
Change preposition
in consumption

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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between males and
juvenile
Fix the agreement mistake
juveniles

It seems that juvenile may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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,
on the contrary
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

women ate more than males and
juvenlie
Correct your spelling
juveniles
juvenile

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throughout the period
in addition
Linking Words

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in the year 2006 the figure
of
Change preposition
for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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women
was reached
Change the verb form
has reached

The context of this sentence suggests that the verb was reached should be in the present perfect form. Consider changing the verb form.

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the peak point it was 35 % after that it decreased to reach
at the end
Linking Words

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of
chart
Add an article
the chart

The noun phrase chart seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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at 30 per cent . On the one
side
Add a comma
side,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase On the one side. Consider adding a comma.

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the rate of men's and
children
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's rose gradually until 2007
whereas
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

it
Correct pronoun usage
apply

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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obviously there are
less
Change the quantifier
fewer

It appears that the quantifier less does not fit with the countable noun declines. Consider changing the quantifier or the noun.

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declines
Fix the agreement mistake
decline

It seems that declines may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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in
Change the preposition
at

The preposition in may be incorrect. Consider changing it to a different preposition.

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the end of
chart
Correct article usage
the chart

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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by
Change preposition
for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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men's
Change noun form
men

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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and
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

children's
Change noun form
children

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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who ate healthy foods .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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