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IELTS - Academic The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS - Academic The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Initially
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, the bar chart illustrated the ratio of
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part-time employees across four countries of the United Kingdom in both 1980 and 2010. As we
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,the highest country was Wales in both of a year .
Whereas
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 3 countries
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fluctuated , to be more accurate the second country after the first will be England ,observing an
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 of around 5
percents
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percent
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 from 1980 to 2010 .
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As well as
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,when it comes to
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Scotland was the third place ,it
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 the best enhancement which was around 10
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 transformation between both years .
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,
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 in
Northen
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Northern
Ireland
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Ireland,
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 there was
not an
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no
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 improvement when it jumped into 2010. The United Kingdom
required
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 to deal
manage
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 that issue as possible as they can .Ultimately, all countries
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 to form a fascinating place where people can work through perfectly as the consequences will be satisfied and better than expected.

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