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Band 5

Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: what are the changes what are the problems you are facing what part of the service would you like to change

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in connection to the recent changes that
occured
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occurred
 in the
bus
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 service and created problems
to
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for
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 travellers.
Firstly
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, the utmost
changed
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 in the routes of the buses.
Secondly
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, the
bus
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 authority did not put any notice on the wall of
bus
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 stations
as well as
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 public transport did not allow any deduction on the tickets who are working in
the
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government offices. Apart from the changes, there are several problems which people are facing like
reach to
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 work on
proper
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time
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, they have to wait in
a long queues
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long queues
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 for long hours. It not only making the things difficult for
young
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the young
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 generation to go to
their
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college but it
also
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put
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effect
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an effect
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 on old age who
were
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apply
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travel by
bus
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 to meet the doctor. The ticket for the higher authority
empolyee
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employee
 is not
same
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the same
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 as other travellers, it is the responsibility of the authority to pay their travel allowance but now they are not giving them that facility. Despite the aforementioned paragraph, the part of service I would like to change is the service
time
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 of the buses would be increased so that multitudes will reach to their destination on a
time
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. When the buses come one after another, individuals do not wait in
a long queues
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long queues
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 and for
long
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a long
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time
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. It would be really appreciated, if
there
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their
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 changes will
made
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be made
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 in upcoming weeks. I am looking forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Manjinder Kaur

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Grammar
Make sure to use correct verb forms and pluralizations (e.g., 'occurred' instead of 'occured' and 'employees' instead of 'empolyee').
Coherence
Consider the clarity of your ideas; ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
Task Achievement
It would be beneficial to include a clearer description of the problems you face due to service changes to strengthen your overall argument.
Coherence
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.
Task Achievement
You have effectively identified the problems faced by the commuters due to the changes in service, which is relevant to the task.
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