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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph shows the import
fluctations
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 of New
Zealand
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 to two countries in a period of 10 years,
this
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 in New
Zealand
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 money millions.
Overall
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, New
Zealand
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imports
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 have a lot of changes in these 10 years. Importations from
Australa
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Australia
 have had an increase in comparison as started as the end.
On the other hand
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, New
Zealand
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imports
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 from
Japan
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 experimented
different
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 kinds of variations but at least
this
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 had a decrease in their number. In the beginning New
Zealand
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 importations were about 1000
million
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, with 4000 New
Zealand
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million
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, over the
imports
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 from
Japan
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. By 1999
importations
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 from
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this
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 two countries had a decrease in their mounts but, in
this
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 year,
imports
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 from Australia were 3.000
million
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,
in contrast
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, in
this
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 same year the
imports
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 from
Japan
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 were around 4.000
million
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. In the
last
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 period, the
imports
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 from Australia
end
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 at 8000
million
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 and
imports
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 from
Japan
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 only with 2000
million
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, these mean a difference of 6000
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, imports, japan, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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