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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts
illustate
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illustrate
 the percentage of
employees
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 in three sectors
agriculture
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,
industry
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 and
services
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 across The
USA
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,
China
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 ,
Japan
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 and
Germany
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 in two periods of time 1980 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that in 1980
agriculture
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 was the most important sector in
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china
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China
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 and the
leat
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least
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employees
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on
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in
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 The
USA
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,
China
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 ,
Japan
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 and
Germany
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.
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 2010, the highest
workers
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 number was
on
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in
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Germany
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for
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in
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industry
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the industry
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 field , and the
least
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lowest
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percentages
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percentage
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 of
workers
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on
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in
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agriculture
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field
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fields
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inThe
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in the
USA
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,
China
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Japan
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and Japan
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. In 1980, more than half of
employees
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 working in
China
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 were in the
agriculture
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 sector, with almost 45% and 40%
on
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in
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industry
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 and
services
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respectivlly
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respectively
.
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Japan
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In Japan
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 and The
USAwith
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USA
 approximately 45%
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workers
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of workers
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on
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in
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industry
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the industry
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 and less than 5%
on
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in
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sectors. For
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services
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the services
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 sector
Germany
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 , The
USA
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China
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were
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had
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 the same percentages
by
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almost45
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almost 45
%. In 2010,
regarding
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apply
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the
industry
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 section in
Germany
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 was almost
with
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apply
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81%
employees
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 , followed
79
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by 79
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%
on
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in
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Japan
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, and 70%
employees
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on
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in
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USA
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand , 40%
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employees
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of employees
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on
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in
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industry
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the industry
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 field
was
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were
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on
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in
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china
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China
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.
Agriculture
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workers
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were blow
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were blown
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 10% on
Japan
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 , The
USA
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 and
Germany
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.
China
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was
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had
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 the highest percentage of
workers
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on
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in
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agriculture
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 by 50% .
Services
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 with almost 40%
employees
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 in
Germany
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 and The
USA
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,
also
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 30% on Jaban and almost 21% of
employess
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employees
employers
 in
China
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, agriculture, industry, services, usa, china, japan, germany, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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