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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
he
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The
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 chart
present
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presents
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 information about
The world
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the World
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health organization
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Health Organization
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recommends
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recommending
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 that people should eat five or more
portion
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portions
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 of fruit and vegetables per day, between
bothe
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both
gendar
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apply
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male and female , the information
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is masured
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masured
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measured
 by percentage.
overall
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,
its
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it's
it is
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 clear from the chart that , there are
Different
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different
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 ages shown in the chart , between every
age
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 group shows
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a diffreance
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diffreance
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difference
differences
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age
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about
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of about
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 10 years in each group.
according to
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 what
shown
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is shown
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,
im
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I'm
 going to
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explain
eplain
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explain
 the
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percentage
perventage
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percentage
 of each
age
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 group
thatat
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that
 five or more
portion
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portions
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 of fruit and vegetables per day, between 19 to 24 almost 15
percent
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per cent
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 of both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 and
in
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from
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 25 to 34 almost 20, from
age
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 35 to 44 nearly 25
percent
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per cent
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 in
age
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 55 to 64 almost 35 and 65 to 74 almost 30 in 75 20
percent
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per cent
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 in
conlusion
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conclusion
,
male
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males
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 are shown
high
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a high
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 percentage as they get old of
consume
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consuming
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 more vegetables and fruit,
female
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females
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 show
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an inrcrease
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inrcrease
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increase
also
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 like men as they get old.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • age group
  • male
  • female
  • health recommendations
  • dietary habits
  • public health
  • trends
  • significance
  • observations
  • gap
  • intake
  • balanced diet
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