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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Xada)

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Xada)
The bar chart below illustrates the value of
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 country's exports in several sections in 2015 and 2016.
In contrast
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, the table provides the proportion change in each group of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Overall
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, it is clear from the charts that, the most outcome rates recorded in the second year expect the Gems and Jewellery category.
Also
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, it is the same point in
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 in values information.
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,
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petroleum products
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 the highest figures across all categories.
According to
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 the data presented, both petroleum goods and engineered items reached a peak at around 5.8 billion in 2015. they
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 rose to approximately 6.2 billion over the next year.
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, the three other sections experienced different situations between
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 and decreases but they gained
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 total of 100 billion from them in one year, with a noticeable climb in 2016.
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, each category has a growth in the change in values by 3%-15% except the Gems and Jewellery .

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