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The charts below show the proportion of British Students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of British Students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The pie charts provide data regarding the
percentage
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 of British
students
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 in a specific university in England who could speak foreign
languages
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, between 2000 and 2010.
It is clear that
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 by far the most significant proportion of them were able to speak
Spanish
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.
Overall
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, the majority of them knew only one different language, except for English. Notably, the
percentage
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 of those with no other language decreased,
whereas
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 there became more university
students
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 with two other
languages
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 spoken. Focusing first on
Spanish
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, French, and German, approximately 1 in 3
students
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 spoke
Spanish
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,
whereas
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 for French and German, the corresponding figures were 1 in 6 and 1 in 10, respectively. By 2010, the
percentage
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 of those
knew
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 how to speak in
Spanish
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 increased by 5%,
whereas
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 for two other
languages
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, the figure was 10%. As for the remaining
languages
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, from 2000 to 2010, the
percentage
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 of British
students
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 spiking in other
foreighn
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foreign
languages
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 rose from 15 to 20 per cent,
while
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 the proportion of those who did not know any halved, from 20% to 10%. Notably, compared to 2000, when only 10% could speak two other
languages
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, by 2010,
this
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 figure rose by 5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, languages, spanish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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