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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The provided line chart illustrates information on four libraries in different regions where citizens borrowed
books
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in particular
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 months in 2014, and the pie chart details the
amount
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number
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 of types of records that were borrowed at the same time.
Overall
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, it can be seen obviously that the number of
books
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 borrowed in Ryeslipe was at the top
then
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 steadily went down, meanwhile, Suttonwood had a fluctuating rate. Following that, the other two villages had similar growth rates. In terms of book types, fiction was the most favourite,
whereas
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, science was the least one. On the one hand, from June to September, the proportion of
books
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 lent in Ryeslipe reached a peak of 300,
then
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 gradually decreased to 155. In the meantime, Suttonwood's rate fluctuated, had a bottom down to 100
then
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 dramatically sky-rocketed at 300.
On the other hand
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, West Easton and Church Mount were different and they maintained the increase from 50 in June to 150 in September. Regards to the pie chart, Fiction was the most common type of reading
by
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with
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 41 per cent, followed by history surprisingly
with
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at
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 34 per cent. Another type of book that surprised
in
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me in
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this
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 survey was biology with 19 per cent. Self-help and science
books
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 shared the second and
last
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 place, respectively 14 and 10 percent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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