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Band 4

You are a member of an organisation which meets regularly at a particular restaurant. The most recent meal you had there was not satisfactory. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter explain why you are writing describe what went wrong with the meal and service suggest what the manager should do to ensure that you and your group return to the restaurant You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear,...

Dear the Manager, I hope
this
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latter
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letter
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 finds you well. I
was
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had our meal at your
restorant
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restaurant
 one month ago and it was bad
food
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 that your employee served us. I and my friends are not
satisfaction
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about
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with
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 the
food
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 that you gave
to
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us. One month ago, before the day of our meeting. I already booked the table and
food
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included
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including
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meal
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a meal
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 for my group and the man
who
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whom
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 I speaking with agreed on what I was booked. When the day of
meet
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meeting
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 with my organization
is
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was
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 coming, they served us
by
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with
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 some
meels
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meals
 and
food
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. But I felt angry and not satisfied because
of
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the meal that we already booked was spend and they
change
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changed
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 it
by
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to
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 another and forced us to
accepted
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 it.
While
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 they asked us to take the meals and
foods
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food
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, your employee forced us and blamed us because came late for about 10 minutes.
Moreover
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, the
services
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service
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 was bad because the
voice
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voices
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 of them to
talk
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talking
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 very
louder
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loudly
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 and it
suprised
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surprised
 my friends. My organization always
make
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holds
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 some events at your place
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also
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and also
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 sometimes do
the
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apply
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meeting
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meetings
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 there. I want you to give my organization free
for
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meals when I will conduct our next meeting on 20 of August. If not. I will look for
another
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other
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restourants
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restaurants
 that we will continue to use and I will write some bad words on your websites caused of your services. Kind Regards,
ibrahim
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Ibrahim
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 john

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grammar
Make sure to use clear language and correct spelling. For example, 'restaurant' instead of 'restorant' and 'letter' instead of 'latter'.
content
Try to give more details about the meal. What was wrong with it specifically?
tone
Use a polite tone throughout the letter. Instead of threatening to write bad words, suggest a solution in a friendly way.
content
You clearly state the problem you faced with the meal and service.
content
You also mentioned the importance of your organization’s events at the restaurant which shows your continued interest.
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