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Interviews form the basic selecting criteria for most large companies. However, some people think that the interview is not a realiable method of choosing whom to employ. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whether or not using
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 as criteria for choosing employees is a widely debated point.
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 some
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 think that
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 are an outdated method,
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 are effective by providing time for preparation and fair judgement for every
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people
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. It is vital to understand that
interviews
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 help interviewees to prepare more carefully.
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 for about 2 weeks which can make
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 feel easier and more comfortable to fully – prepare.
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, American companies select their workers after waiting for a period of time and based on their performances.
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, their demonstrations at the
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 will be enhanced, leading to not only a higher chance of getting the job
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 but
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 making it easier for the interviewers to evaluate them. Another significant factor is
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 provide an equal environment of interviewing for everyone.
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 the fact that if
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 take an
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, they will be put into the same condition for elimination. Using the
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 for that reason can make
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 feel equal in treatment and
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more attracted to resign
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 the company,
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, helping the company to avoid
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mistakes when interviewing them.
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,
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 strengthen the input of the workforce.
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, some
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 believe that
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 are useless nowadays because of
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 outdated methods of choosing workers.
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 belief is based on the fact that the
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 can not treat all aspects of the interviewee because it is quite hard to make the
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 competence of an interviewee just only through a question–and–answer format. They can be right to an extent, but by holding an
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 and starting a CV screening process simultaneously,
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,
interviews
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 are still useful in choosing employees. In conclusion,
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 being thought to be useless,
interviews
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 are still beneficial by providing time for preparation and judging equally individuals. If
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interviews
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 for selecting workers, the company will have a strong workforce which contains several talented
people
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 chosen carefully.

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Make sure each point is explained clearly with simple examples.
coherence and cohesion
Try to link your ideas more smoothly; use words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
task achievement
Good use of personal opinion and clear structure in your essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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