General You and your neighbours have noticed that the trash collection services where you live have recently been quite bad. Write a letter to your local council. In your letter: explain what you have recently experienced explain what the neighbours have recently experienced ask what action will be taken to improve the service. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express our dissatisfaction with
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to garbage collection that we noticed recently with other neighbours. First and foremost, I encountered that the organic bins, small size and large size, were not collected during the
last
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month. Unfortunately,
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caused the driveway to become a hideous place.
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,
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foods, especially during hot days, seemed to be smelled annoyingly.
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, my
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were
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exposed to unacceptable
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by these service providers, especially a resident called Emma.
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she advised trash collectors to have better service, she
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responded
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insulting expressions,
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as
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shut up.
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, another resident called Michael
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had
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inappropriate experience prior
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week.
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, to resolve
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matter, we will submit an application form which clearly states what situation we have
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across.
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, we will participate in an online QA meeting to request the trash collection team
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be replaced by a new team. Thank you for the time to consider
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matter. I look forward to receiving a prompt response soon. Yours faithfully, Ozgur Dalga

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coherence and cohesion
Try to stay focused on one main idea per paragraph. This will help your letter flow better.
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Make sure to use a respectful and polite tone throughout your letter.
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Clearly organize your experiences to emphasize the main points of concern.
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You included experiences from both yourself and your neighbors, which makes your letter stronger.
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Your letter has a clear structure with a greeting and closing, which is good.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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