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The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and The USA from 1994 to 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and The USA from 1994 to 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The graph compares the price of
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a banana
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banana
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bananas
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 in four
country
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 between 1994 and 2004
Overall
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, Categories experienced different trends,
while
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 USA
trend's
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 went steadily As the graph shows Japan's banana export figure started at down 2.00
dollars
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 in 1994 followed by
increase
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an increase
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 to around 2.80
dollars
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 in 1995.
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 it
flactuated
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fluctuated
 until 2004 it fell
exactly
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to exactly
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 2.50
dollars
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. Regarding France's exports, in 1994 they went steadily till 1999.
This
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 figure
increase
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 with
flactuation
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fluctuation
to
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in
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 2004 and reached above 1.50
dollars
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. Germany's
export
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exports
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 experienced
small
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a small
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 decrease
by
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in
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 years until 1999 it reached 1.50
dollars
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than
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then
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 it declined to approximately 1.00
dollars
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 in 2004
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contrast
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contrast,
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 the banana export from
USA
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the USA
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 experienced a small increase between 1994 and 1995 above 0.50 cents to above 1.00
dollars
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 than
USA
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the USA
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 category gives data about, their category went steadily over a decade

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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