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The graph below the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The graph below the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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 of UK guests from overseas for different causes in 1989 and 2009.
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 two Trent shared similar standings in other one has various changes. In 1989 visitors for meetings friends and relatives were around 3 million and
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 figure followed an uninterrupted upward trajectory to 8 million in around 2005. But
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 growth wasn't sustained.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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