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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should The chart illustrates the total population in four main countries in the world namely India, China, USA and Japan in 1950,2002 and the projected population in 2050. The data shown in percentage.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should The chart illustrates the total population in four main countries in the world namely India, China, USA and Japan in 1950,2002 and the projected population in 2050. The data shown in percentage.
Overall
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, Japan has
smallest
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 percentage of the
population
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. Meanwhile,
China
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 has the biggest
population
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 in the world.
China
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 has the largest
population
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 in 1950 and 2002 which is 23% and 20% respectively.
However
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,
China
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 citizens are projected to reduce by 5% in 2050
accounted
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 for 15% which
similar
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with
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 Indian people in 1950.
On the other hand
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,
Indian
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the Indian
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population
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are increase
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increased
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 steadily from 15%
1950
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in 1950
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 to 17% in 2002. The
population
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expected
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is expected
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 to increase up to 18% in 2050. In 1950, the US
is
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accounted for 7%
from
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of
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total
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the total
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population
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 in the world. The
numbers
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number
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 is reduced to 5% in 2002 and
predicted
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is predicted
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 to maintain in 2050. Japan has the smallest
population
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compare
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 to
China
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 which only accounted for 4%
from
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of
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total
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the total
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population
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 in 1950. Japanese people
are
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were
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 reduced
down
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apply
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to 3% in 2002 and
expected
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are expected
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 to reach
it
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its
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 lowest
population
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 in 2025 which is 1% only.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 3 times.
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