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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data provides information about the
percentage
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 of experienced females who worked as managers in three different firms from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
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, Eldan
Ltd
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 and Bamforth
Ltd
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 saw dramatic increases in the numbers over a period of 40 years ,
whereas
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 the
percentage
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 of Finsbury
Ltd
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 fluctuated through the period.
To begin
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 with, the two companies , namely the Eldan
Ltd
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 and the Bamforth
Ltd
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, started at less than 10% in 1975, resulting in around one-fifth that of Finsbury for the former and about half for the latter, respectively.
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, after 10 years of stability, the figure for the former increased almost fivefold, ending up accounting for more than 60% in 2015.
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,
as a result
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, the
percentage
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 of the latter rose nearly five times higher, compared to its figure in 1975, reaching its peak at 46%. Regarding Finsbury
Ltd
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, the proportion was 16% in 1975, which was the top position of all.
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, after the constant ups and downs in its number, in 2015, the
percentage
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 became the lowest of all, at 26%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, ltd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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