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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information
of
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on
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 the proportion of household
type
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types
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 living in poverty in Australia in 1999. It
divide
Wrong verb form
is divided
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by
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into
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 six categories with different
amount
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amounts
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 in every family type. The biggest proportion
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 taken by solo
parent
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parents
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Punctuation problem
, in
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in
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with
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total
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a total
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21
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of 21
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% in 232.000. It was
high
Correct article usage
a high
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 amount for
single
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singles
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 with no children
with
Punctuation problem
, with
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percentage
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a percentage
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19
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of 19
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% in
number
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the number
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 359.000.
However
Linking Words
,
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couple
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couples
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 with children
also
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 hold 12% in 933.000.
On the other hand
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, the
last
Linking Words
 three
family
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families
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 had
small
Correct article usage
a small
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 count percentage
in
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of
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 under 10%.
Use synonyms
Couple
Correct article usage
A couple
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 with no children had 7% in figure 211.000. Followed by
single
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a single
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 aged person in 6% with numerial 54.000. The lowest proportion was taken by aged
couple
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 people
in
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at
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 4% in 48.000. In
summarise
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summary
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, the total of
the
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apply
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all
household
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households
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reach
Correct subject-verb agreement
reaches
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up to
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apply
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1.837.000
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is almost two million, mostly
took
Wrong verb form
taken
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 by solo
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parents
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parent
Punctuation problem
parent,
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then
Linking Words
aged
Correct article usage
the aged
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couple
Use synonyms
 was the lowest household.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words couple with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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