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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates
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percent
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the percentage
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 of workers in three classes
the
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in the
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 various countries
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,
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Germany, USA,Japan, and
chian
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China
during
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, during
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 the period
in
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from
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 1989 to 2020. As the graph shows, Germany
In
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in
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Indenstry
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Industry
the
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apply
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repersentad
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represented
 the highest over the year, it had started at around 67
perccent
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per cent
 of
sectores
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sectors
 than
the
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then
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was grow
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grew
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repiady
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rapidly
 in 2010.Followed by
a
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apply
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japan
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Japan
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 began at approximately 50% of
industriay
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industry
, after that rose from around
80
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80,
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 it is considered the biggest
classes
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class
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.
In addition
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, the service
commonced
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decreased
at
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to
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 approximately 50
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percent
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per cent
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,
whereas
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 in 2010 was
decresed
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decreased
 to around 40 percentage of the classes.
By contrast
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,
In
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in
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USA
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the USA
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of workers in
three
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the three
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sectore bagen
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sectors began
 at around 41
than becoming
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and increased to
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the
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a
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higher
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high
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in2010
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of in2010
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.
the
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The
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serivice
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service
 the same live
in1998
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in 1998
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, than
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than
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then
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maissve
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massive
 drop to around 30
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percent
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per cent
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. Regarding the
agecieg
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age of the Chinese
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in
chian
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apply
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the highest
sectore
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sector
 in 1980,
whereas
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in2010
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in 2010
there
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it
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 showed go down to 50
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percent
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per cent
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sectore
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sector

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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