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The line graph gives date about the cost of banana in 4 countries in period from 1994 to 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph gives date about the cost of banana in 4 countries in period from 1994 to 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph gives
date
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data
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 about the
cost
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 of
banana
Fix the agreement mistake
bananas
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 in 4 countries in
period
Correct article usage
the period
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 from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, in Germany the
price
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 for
banana
Correct article usage
a banana
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 was the highest,
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However
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however
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, in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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was
Correct pronoun usage
it was
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 the lowest. From 1994 to
1997
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1997,
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 in
France
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France,
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 the
cost
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 shared
similar
Correct article usage
a similar
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 standing
which
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, which
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 was 1.75.
at
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At
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 the same time
in
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, in
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 Japan was the figure rebounded
which
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, which
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 was at the beginning 1.45
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then
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, then
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 down to
1.25
Punctuation problem
1.25,
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then
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go
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went
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 up to 1.50 and
stay
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stayed
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 stable for 2
years
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. From 1997 to 2000 the France and Japan followed by mirror fall and a subsequent rise. In
2001
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2001,
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 France
face
Wrong verb form
faced
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 the top of
it
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its
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 growth
but
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, but
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this
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 peak was not maintained
and
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, and
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price
Fix the agreement mistake
prices
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fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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down
Change preposition
apply
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from 1.80 to 1.0 in 2003, and in 2004 for increased to 1.60. At the same time
in
Punctuation problem
, in
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 Japan in 2001 was
the
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a
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little
Correct word choice
slight
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 rise from 1.10 to 1.40
and
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, and
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 droning other days
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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down
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apply
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slowly to 1.20. In
Correct article usage
the USA
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USA
Punctuation problem
USA,
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 the rise was significant in
period
Correct article usage
the period
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 from 1994 to 1996, the
cost
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 was the highest of all time
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was 2.75, but
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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this
Linking Words
 peak was not
kept
Verb problem
sustained
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 during other
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years
Punctuation problem
years,
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 the
price
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fallen down
Wrong verb form
fell
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 to 2
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then
Punctuation problem
, then
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 to 1.90. and in 2001 showed its lowest
cost
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which
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, which
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 was 1.60
and
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, and
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 during other
years
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 showed consistent growth
and
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, and
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at the end
Linking Words
 the
price
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 was 2.50. At the same in
Germany
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Germany,
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 there were many
years
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 of stability
,
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.
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from
Fix capitalization
From
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 1995 to
1996
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1996,
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 the
const
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cost
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 was 1.25
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then
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, then
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faced
Correct pronoun usage
it faced
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decrease
Correct article usage
a decrease
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 to 1.0
but
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, but
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 the next year reversed
,
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.
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after
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After
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that
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that,
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 there
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 6
year
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years
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 of stability
and
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, and
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at the
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end
Add a comma
end,
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 the
cost
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 was 1.20.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, price, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stability" was used 2 times.
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