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The charts above show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The charts above show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The first graph displays information about money
between
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spent at
restaurants
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 or at home. The second chart displays the number of
meals
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on
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at
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 fast
food
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 and
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sitdown
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restaurants
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. The most prominent feature is that over the years, people are spending more and more money on restaurant
meals
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while
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 eating more fast
food
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. There is a significant trend in the pie chart. From 10% in 1970 to 50% in 2000, the percentage of
food
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 budget spent on restaurant
meals
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 continued to climb. In 1970, fast
food
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meals
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 and
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sitdown
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restaurants
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 were on the same starting line, at around 20
meals
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 per
year
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. They started increasing and in 1980,
meals
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 in
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sitdown
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restaurants
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 were more popular than fast
food
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.
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,
this
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 changed in 1990 when the number of fast
food
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meals
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 reached approximately 50
meals
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 per
year
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and
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sitdown
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restaurants
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 were just a little over 40. Fat
food
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meals
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 dramatically increased in the next
10
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year
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 period, and the statistic reached a record-high of 90
meals
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 in a
year
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.
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 the number of
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sitdown
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restaurants
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 was still rising, it was slow
and
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 the gap substantially widened.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurants, meals, food, sitdown, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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