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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast-food restaurants and sit-down restaurants per family. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari sons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast-food restaurants and sit-down restaurants per family. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari sons where relevant.
The pie chart provides data regarding the percentages of
food
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 budget spent by the average household on restaurant or homemade
meals
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 from 1979 to 2000,
whereas
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 the graph shows the number of
meals
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 they ate in fast
food
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 or
sitdown
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sit-down
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 restaurants annually throughout
this
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 period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 at the beginning of the period, the vast majority of families cooked at
home
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,
while
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at the end
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, the proportions for
home
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 and restaurant
meals
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 were equal. It is
also
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 evident that fast
food
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meals
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 became extremely popular among citizens in the second part of the period. Focusing first on the percentages of the budgets spent on restaurant or homemade
food
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, between 1970 and 1980, 90% and 85% of
money
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the money
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 went on
home
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 cooking,
whereas
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 in 1990, the proportion dropped by approximately 10%.
In
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This
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this
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 year, people started to eat more in
restaurantss
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restaurants
, spending more than a third of their income on these
meals
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. Notably, in 2000, they spent exactly the same sums on eating at
home
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 or in restaurants. Turning to the number of
meals
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 in fast
food
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 and
sitdown
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sit-down
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 restaurants, in 1970, the figures for both of them stayed at 20, which started to increase to approximately 28 and around 35 by 1980, respectively.
However
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, by 2000, the number
for
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of
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 fast
food
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meals
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 rose only by 15,
whereas
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 for the other category, the figure hit the peak, reaching almost 90.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, meals, home with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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