the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of france in two years

the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of france in two years
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of france in two years
The two given pie charts demonstrate
comparability
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the comparability
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of
variety
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the variety
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type renewable
energy
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sources which are generated in France in two separate
years
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(1995-2005). At
the
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apply
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first glance, it is patently evident that
,
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apply
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among range of
energy
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manufacture
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manufacturers
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have
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has
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different
preference
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preferences
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.
in
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In
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both these
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years
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years,
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produce coal, gas,
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Petro
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petroleum
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, nuclear and other. In terms of comparison,
exclude
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excluding
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Petro
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, other production has been growing. As can be clearly seen from the first pie chart, coal comparison with 29.80% and after 10
years
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with
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apply
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rose around
1
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1,
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remained the most produced
energy
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type in both
years
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.
In contrast
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, other
energy
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sources had the smallest proportion among all production
and
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, and
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after on decade with the most growth, it
was
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still remained
the
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at the
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minimum significantly.
On the other hand
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, gas and
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petro
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petroleum
in 1995 had the same proportion
approximately
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, approximately
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29%. It was reported, 10
years
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later
gas
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, gas
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rise
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rose
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slightly,
whereas
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petro
Correct your spelling
petroleum
generate
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generated
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less than before
with
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, with
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19.55%.
Furthermore
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, nuclear
energy
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as same
as
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like
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other
had
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forms, has
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improved significantly

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, years, petro with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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