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The line graph illustrates the proportion of Australian exports to four countries — Japan, the US, China, and India — over the period from 1990 to 2012.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of Australian exports to four countries — Japan, the US, China, and India — over the period from 1990 to 2012.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of Australian
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 to four countries — Japan, the US,
China
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, and India — over the period from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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while
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 the percentage of
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 to
China
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 and India experienced significant growth, Japan and the US saw a general decline. Notably,
China
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 became Australia’s top export destination by the end of the period. In 1990, Japan accounted for the largest share of Australian
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 at around 27%, but
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 figure steadily dropped to approximately 17% by 2012.
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 to the US fluctuated moderately, starting at just over 11%, peaking at around 12% in 2000, and
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 decreasing to below 7% by 2012.
In contrast
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 to
China
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 showed a dramatic increase. Starting at a modest 2% in 1990, the figure surged significantly after 2000, reaching about 28% in 2012, surpassing all other countries. Meanwhile, India’s export percentage remained almost unchanged until 2000, after which it rose steadily from around 2% to 6% by the end of the period.

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