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Band 3

Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person.

There is a view that occupation interviews have to be done before hiring employees by
owner
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the owner
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.
While
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 others oppose
this
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 notion, I personally argue in
favor
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favour
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as
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, as
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 with
this
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 way they can evaluate
this
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 person's communication skills. In my opinion, it depends on what type of
work
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should do workers
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workers should do
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, if
this
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work
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 is related to conversation where they should give information to
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customers
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costumers
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costumers,
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 it's obviously vital.
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Also
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Also,
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 it's good when they have problematic situations where they can fix it by good service or
ability
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the ability
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 to talk and calm down people.
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, when it
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 occasion and they can't even say something
rather
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other
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 than discuss the issue and find a
solution
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solution,
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 it will damage the reputation of
company
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the company
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.
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, when it does not require discussion with clients or
this
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 job is connected to physical
work
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which
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, which
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is don't
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doesn't
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need to think
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require thinking
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 ot
have
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having
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some
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apply
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experience
of
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working
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work
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 with consumers. In that
case
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case,
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 the job interview is not necessary
as
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, as
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 in
this
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 type of
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task
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tasks
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tasks,
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 the most important thing is manual
labor
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labour
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instead
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 of conversation abilities. In conclusion, finding out information about workers is essential because it will help you find out about a person’s abilities and whether he or she will be able to cooperate with you in the future.

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task achievement
Provide clearer reasons for your opinion and include more examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that relates to your overall argument.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your thoughts well.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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