You started in your present job two years ago.You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your manager .In your letter say what you have learned in your present job suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department explain why you do not wish to leave the company

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to request
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that I
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another department to develop my skills.I started working with your firm two years ago and I was doing well as I
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my full concentration.
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during my work,
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how to organise
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work.
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to do their work easily and put their ideas in any project. I
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that you provided another opportunity to enhance my ability.I would like to move IT department because recently, I did
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course during my job,so you would
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see my skills for
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department.
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will be beneficial for your company because I have full command
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. I do not want to leave
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company because I have been working with you for
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two years.I believe
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field as a career. Yours faithfully, Rabia Rizwan.

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Try to clearly state your request in the first paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea.
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Use a more formal tone throughout the letter.
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You explained what you have learned in your job clearly.
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You expressed your desire to stay with the company which shows loyalty.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • career development
  • transferable skills
  • professional growth
  • department
  • diversify experience
  • benefit
  • contribute
  • innovate
  • perspective
  • team collaboration
  • job satisfaction
  • company loyalty
  • internal transfer
  • long-term commitment
  • value addition
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